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Narrator: Upon a wonderful time of knights and heros come the story of this.....
Image of Cinderalla and her prince pop up out of the blue.
Narrator: NO! NO! It's the story about the Sigma Star game which the writer of the story is playing! Which doesn't have knights or much of heros since it is a decieving type of game and its happens with Krill(aliens) and space with funky weird planets...anyways back to the story...oh Sh....

Swaying in the breeze while waving in green rows, were the grass on which the magician had been sitting on smothered a body shaped print into the ground.

She gently sat herself upright to glance around at her surrounds by the small lake in the forest. Instead of laying back down again she jumped straight up just enough to scare her near by company.

"It's time to get up." she yawned slyly and giggled at her companys reaction.

The man stood up and stretched while holding his staff up in both of his hands in the air as if to declare he was the king of the world.

"Already?" he muttered after the shocking of his mourning rang in.

"Oh don't worry my apprentice," she smirked while grabing their packs "You've could've seen me naked instead."

"Oh how a plesant a mourning that would've been." he chuckled trying to dodge the apple she threw.
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Please comment on my(1st) story ^^;

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Quite short, but it your first story, so I'll let it slide.
there are some minor grammatical errors, like possession.

it could've flowed a bit more, seemed like some of the wording is awkward and makes the reader pause. don't be afraid to give the reader some more meat and potatoes (as my Lit. teacher would say)

I've been in english classes too long during the day, can't you tell :D

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I have read Deathly Hallows, so now I really believe that Snape is a good person at heart!
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lol well this is part of a series of storys since i dont want to stay up all night writting too much and yes i can't spell that well since i'm only in grade 10 -.- i do more hands on type of stuff at school not really much of writting

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